[PDF / Epub] ☄ The Enchanted Grandfathers Clock By Charlotte Jones – Ebats.us

The Enchanted Grandfathers Clock Jamie S Adventure Begins With His Summer Holiday At Aunt Jane S Flamingo Pink Cottage And The Twist Of A Key In An Old Wooden Grandfather S Clock He Can T Believe He Is Faced With The Challenge Of Chime Or The Doom That Will Come If He Does Not Complete All The Challenges Ahead Of Him Successfully Jamie Delights In Meeting His New Friends Especially The Time Keeper Who Explains How He Is The Chosen Guest In Their Enchanted Land The Evil Time Taker Has Quite A Different Plan And Is Determined To See Jamie Fail His Mission He Plots To Take The Crown Of Cogs From The Time Keeper And Will Not Tolerate Any Child Getting In His Way.

    8 thoughts on “[PDF / Epub] ☄ The Enchanted Grandfathers Clock By Charlotte Jones – Ebats.us

  1. says:

    You have a very good story here I believe it could become a favorite for many kids The pictures are very colorful and cute However, it is in need of many edits It becomes a bit tiresome with the many words that are missing or are extra, especially at the beginning I think you can really make this book shine to it s full potential if you get it to someone who can correct the little annoying things that get in the way now It all could just be the translation to english Is not smooth.Watch out for too many exclamation marks they are to be use sparingly No than 5 in the whole book.Also watch out for ing at the end of the verbs They are passive voice and you need to be exciting in your writing Was is also passive try changing most of them Also watch out for repetitions If you say it once, it is good but do NOT repeat it Readers get it the first time when you use other words to say the same thing counts here too Books aren t usually done double spaced Single space would make the book smaller and better for your audience I love the cover You want your readers to keep turning the pages, but if they get tired of the things mentioned above, they will put your books down and never buy a book with your name on it again even if you become much better at writing in the future.We only have one chance to impress our readers, so make sure that your book, it is the best ...

  2. says:

    This is a children s story, with an enchanting and imaginative plot that I m sure children will love However, the voice of the 10 year old narrator is indistinguishable from the voices of adult characters and narrators His word choices do not seem like words a boy his age would use for example, he says he is feeling angst While it is quite possible that the boy is supposed to be precocious in his vocabulary, it would be effective if there was some reference to it and also if his voice was distinctive from others I also found many distracting errors Narrative sentences ended in question marks words were missing or used incorrectly symbols for cymbals, for example in some cases words were repeated There were many run on sentences separated by commas or no punctuation at all The point of view shifted from first to third person and from character to character frequently, sometimes confusing m...

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